post some of your writings here to show off or get help or whatver...yeah.

here's something i wrote, for starters:

"I had a nightmare that I was in Hell"

"Tomorrow has set with the sun
Today is gone with the chosen one
Yesterday is just imagination
Home is just a barren nation

I’m lost because direction is a lie
And truth is gone just like the light
What’s a situation without solution?
What’s a conflict without resolution?

This is only home because the name
This is only pain because the state
This is only me because my soul

There must be something I still must lose
But my mind is just clouded and confused
I can’t think of what I could ever gain
So what’s the point in losing this game?

I don’t need a reason to let go
I need a reason not to"

© Andrew C.

is the first paragraph trying to convey a vague and various feeling? and set the scene slightly? the second is a bit angered and melencoly? Is the third the sort of patterned one (all sentences begin with "this is only") and I'm thinking maybee a brighter purpose would be bit...you know. It's a good poem otherwise. good job.

Well i dont wright poems but i wright stories so yeah im not going to a post a novel im working right now ont he mesage board...but i would if i could!

I write poems and stories, but I can't think of any right now.

i have a buttload of stuff, but alas i am too lazy to type it.

I have poems and stories
but I dont share them

i write about how fucked up a family household can be, but sadly, that was all left on my laptop, which fell out of my window, because of my sister...

awww. that actually pretty depressing ethan.
good job on the poem Supreme loser :)do you have another name i can call you? supremeloser sounds depressing.

Andrew's fine.

Thanks for reading it and stuff, yah.

Hey I was wondering if any of you have anything you're written that you would like to share I love writing poetry and even some stories/novels that aren't even near being completed. Will probably take years if I even finish them.

I hope I don't sound like an english teacher but I would love to read stuff you guys wrote.
And I do have one poem in particular that I might share, but I asked to see yours first

I come up with things in my head, but then never write them down. Or if I write them down, I find out that Marilyn Manson or someone already wrote it. But I will look in my papers and see.

I just wrote a story then.. its 4 pages long. grrr stupid school! making me use my brain.

Lizzy does insist
theres already a thread like this
but this computer is crazy
and I'm very lazy
so I'll just lengthen my to-do list

crap, I'm a little bit wasted and my friend will think I got lost but I will post my poem later

Ok so I'm really going out on a limb with this because it actually is really quite personal, but...there are alot of metaphors in this poem and everyone I have showed it to has had no idea what it's really about. But actually practically the whole thing is a metaphor, lol. I'll just say that is absolutely not about love...


The door is flung
No militias to guard
Distort the dreams
Resonate the thoughts.

Rocks in the soup
Swim
Swim;
Fade in

Fade away.

The agent meets the lips
Chokes and down a sink
Won’t precipitate
A world so flat.

Make love to me
With a firm grasp
Tell me you love me
While

I hate you.

Pry the mouth and consume
Indifference perforates a silk sheet
And takes the lover
From aback.




PS: the search buttom is a bunch of shit and I looked 6 pages back, so deal with it

It not so shitty
I searched for "poems" and there it was, the original thread

anyways...its merged

done and done

edit: madeline being bitchy please ignore

Its asking people to post their "writings" which includes lyrics stories and poems...
and I think its nice to keep all such things compiled together

plus the less amount of repeated threads the easier it is to find something you're looking for

it just is sad that the starter of this thread is no longer here

and the title is kinda vague. I like my title of the thread better.

forgive me for being so upfront. it must be the bitchy side of my personality, sorry.

its very vague...I don't really understand it

the poem. yeah, well the real meaning is WAY complicated.

can't explain here to personal. too many metaphors, yeah I know. everything in that poem is basicaly a metaphor for something else.

it's not about love what so ever. It's like "making love" to something that puts you in major distress, but you can't help it? It just takes over your life. It's something that haunts you and....resisting ....ahem...well stuff that can make you feel better but makes you indifferent to things.

This is gonna bite me in the ass. excuse me, I had a bit to drink tonight

hahahaha, in this right place are passing a gay song, and the guy of your signature seems to be dancing it!

I should have never shared that poem, it is to abstract and no one likes it or whatever. I have a different one that is easily understood, but it's too personal and I don't like to whore my problems to people.

Edit the post if you don't want the poem to be there. I think I got some of the imagery in it.

good thinking, lol.
I don't honestly care. I mean no one gets it anyway

don't worry about people not liking it or not understanding it
I like the fact that you wrote it about your emotions towards something and that you had the guts to share it with us

the good thing about poems like that is that people can relate and connect with it over different things that it wasn't originally written about
so then people can enjoy it...and you can retain your bit of privacy

Yeah I like that other people can think it means different things. Or I think if you really really read into it you can get the idea. I like things that you have to ponder over...I do have another that is quite literal, but becuase of that it's too personal if you get what I mean.

I think I was a jerk last night I don't remember, I was a little messed up...and I was way hungover in the morning so I apoligize for my grumpiness.

my toe itches

http://www.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1912120

Thie is my fave, erm, poem:


A certain young gourmet of Crediton
Took some pate de foie gras and spread it on
A chocolate biscuit
Then murmured, "I'll risk it."
His tomb bears the date that he said it on.

Hmmm... that poem is okay - although parts of it don't make sense and it doesn't really go anywhere. Just my opinion, I always sucked at poetry and your poem is probably better than anything I've ever come up with .

My fave poem:
Beach Burial


Softly and humbly to the Gulf of Arabs
The convoys of dead sailors come;
At night they sway and wander in the waters far under,
But morning rolls them in the foam.

Between the sob and clubbing of gunfire
Someone, it seems, has time for this,
To pluck them from the shallows and bury them in burrows
And tread the sand upon their nakedness;


And each cross, the driven stake of tidewood,
Bears the last signature of men,
Written with such perplexity, with such bewildered pity,
The words choke as they begin -


"Unknown seaman" - the ghostly pencil
Wavers and fades, the purple drips,
The breath of wet season has washed their inscriptions
As blue as drowned men's lips,


Dead seamen, gone in search of the same landfall,
Whether as ememies they fought,
Or fought with us, or neither; the sand joins them together,
Enlisted on the other front.



Kenneth Slessor

Marilyn, I like your poem a lot. You don't need to understand something to like it- I personally like more vague poems.

I love writing. I've written a few poems and stories... Maybe I'll post one of them.

I don't write poems-persay(?)

I'm in a band and I write lyrics, i shall post some.

"Every day an atheist is born"

In the parking lot of a vacant church I scream at the top of
My lungs, they burn. My face, it sinks in one final attempt to achieve belief.
I swear,
in an empty call to an absent god, I hear nothing but my own echo.
From a faith not there, none left to spare.
In a belief, it's easier to believe that nothing's there.
I desperately need a fall back plan to hold me upright again.
But oh, no.
There's nothing more than a rainbow to remind me the world's ended twice before.
And what's come of it? It all just fell to shit.
The consumer's hooked, now we won't quit.
We don't care.
As long as it sends us more quickly
to the fiery
abyss where satan lives.
Wondering, "Maybe I should've repented for my sins".
But--
The moon it casts a shadow past the
heretic and lustfull caste.
'Tis evilness it knows no end.
There'd be no crime and some still will sin.
To the collared necks, everything's against
the holy bible's text
The court and law's not enough, they'll take our education next.
And shove their god down our throats.
And only then will faith seem real
But, with our age goes how we feel.
Apathy, it takes hold of me.
Such has felt meloncholly.
What feels the worst is to feel nothing.



the sound is all in how it is sung.
it doesn't look good on paper-er- computer screens.
I just noticed.
I write stories, and stuff, too.

hahahaha wow, I was really really moody in this thread

that poem is an example of my mind in it's most wacked moments. I only write things when I'm in really insane moods. when I write things they only make sense to me

anyway, ignore me, I was probably out of my mind

by the way, Richard, I like those lyrics much better than I could do

I miss you, ethan. has anyone heard from him lately?

my lat writting wos in a drawing.. it said:
I''ve being in some ways that anyone had being,
But evryone have passed
Pulled to see the dead landscapes...
... I just hope that this serve for something..
i dunno if it's serve but i tryed to say that i hope that that thing mades something good. it was in spanish... and it said a lot.

last

did you translate that from spanish?

yes, everything that i speak here is translated by my. i'm argentinian..

noonetoldmesomethigabutmywritting,isitshitty?

noonetoldmesomethigabutmywritting,isitshitty?

it's fine. it's really pretty good.

i dont care if anyone reads mine, but i will post another once i dig through livejournal.

thnx.

you're welcome

Great writing, guys.

I guess I could post a poem, it's fairly short:


War.
War is bloody.
War is terrible
War breaks.
War destroys.

War; it's powerful.
War is everything.
War is nothing.
War is death.
War for peace.

I like that. Straight to the point, and I totally agree with it

Thanks